Seed - (2nd rifts)

OK, so sat down with the guitar to try and put the music and lyrics together, so this is it so far.


OK, so lets break it down a bit.

Intro (0:00 - 0:20)

OK, so this survived almost unchanged. The tone is much better, though, after spending about 20 minutes fiddling with nobs.

Let me reiterate what I said earlier - I hate the pods digital tones. What I hate most is the lack of natural sustain that you get through an amp,  so its not really the pods fault, more the recording process.

Verse (0:20 - 0:42, 0:53 - 1:14, 1:47 - 2:08)

This time I took the background rift and brought it forward. I did this mainly because I wanted to create the guitar parts that I would play in the song, but then found my playing got sloppy maintaining the speed of the rhythm, so my playing will have to change again on this one.

Transition (0:43 - 0:53, 1:35 - 1:46)

This was originally meant to be a bridge, but I liked it so much I moved it into the verse to break it up and play with the structure a bit. It was a bit hard to swing back into the verse, but I liked it so far.

One big problem was that by breaking up the verse, I have forced myself into the position where I have to write more lyrics...

Chorus (1:15 - 1:35, 2:09 - 2:30)

Bigger change here. I  have moved the whole chorus down to C - which I thought was going to be a pain in the butt because I was trying to move from the transition straight into the chorus. Then I realised I could go straight from the verse and it worked... sort of. Because the note is heading down I'm not sure if it stands out against the rest of the rifts.

Having said that, I really enjoy the second part of the rift when it returns to D. I think the rift might be a little too familiar at the moment, and as I can't quite put my finger on it I can't say whether I'm accidentally plagiarising someone like Korn, or whether I'm cannibalising one of my old songs.

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What next? Well, there's still more to go on this one. I will have to extend the song and build out the ending. I will be adding further lyrics as I go, and this is all before it gets played in the band room.