Seed - (Structure)

I've got this to about as far as I want to take it without taking it into the band room, and maybe beyond what I'm comfortable sharing, but here goes nothing.

So, what you're listening to is a first rough draft of the song, complete with the major sections I want to contribute, a rough vocal guide and a fairly complete first look at the song. So, breaking down what's new:

Vocal  Track

This is something I rarely do, and with good reason. What you are listening to is not my regular singing voice - this is me sitting down in front of my computer singing quietly into my computer's built-in microphone.

Why?

Two reasons:

My kids are asleep, so I cannot belt out at my regular volume without disturbing family and neighbours. This is all recorded in the storage room at the entrance of our apartment, so no way am I going to be able to deliver volume.

And the inbuilt microphone? Because all of my microphones are sitting at the bandroom. I considered buying a cheap karaoke microphone just for home, but I do this so rarely I didn't see the point.

So why do it at all? I think for my own curiosity, to see how it all sounds together. Forgive of the vocal performance - this is nothing like what it will sound like at the end, when I get to add range and dynamics to it.

Also notice, the actual lyrics are not yet complete, as the third verse is just a repetition of the second. I am considering adding lyrics after the second chorus to do something different structurally.

Structure

I am shocked at how short this is, clocking in at 3:19, and there are more than enough rifts to extend this song further. I dare say when the rest of the band begins to mold this (again, with the understanding that they may just say 'no') we'll see it extend, but I actually like the idea of keeping it fairly short.

Hell, it's even a slow tempo, at least by my standards (90bpm - and the Fall demo clocks in at 150bpm and lasts 5 minutes), and has 5 different rifts in it, so who's to say its not designed to be a short song.

Bridge

 Ok, considering I'm already very happy with 2 of the rifts in this piece (the transition between the verses and the heavy rift in the chorus) I'm pretty impressed with the two rifts I wrote here for the bridge. I can't help feeling some level of deja-vu, and I suspect I'm rewriting one of my own rifts here (check the chorus from Formaldehyde for what I mean) but the second rift is one that I'm pretty happy with.

Hopefully, if we do extend it, these sections can add some sources to break us out of our regular verse / chorus / verse / chorus / bridge / chorus / out structure.